This piece, was different in the fact that it was the teacher that was asking the questions but this was not made clear untill the middle of the piece. This caused some confusion for me but overall a great piece.
For the brevity of this piece it's point is well heard from the start. This being a demo, I believe that the full length piece will be greatly recieved.
The open, is very upbeat and has some positive shock value. Which definitely grabs attention right away. The story is conveyed very well and uses some very great transitions between the sound bytes. The production is great and the meshing of the pieces and parts are good as well.
A good opener, the music was excellent and opening with the title as a question was to pose to the audience was great. And honest piece wanting answers from a society that refuses to give them. Good work!
A piece that could be shortened by at least a minute. Also, this piece did not grab my attention to great effect. But I will say that the target audience is well shown, and the message is clear. A strong open and close will improve this piece in my opinion.
This piece, while informative is a bit bland. Without using music it comes off as bland. The sound bytes are also too long even though the piece is short you loose the attention of the audience very fast. The average human attention span is about 2 seconds, which means you have that long to grab the audiences attention before they decide to listen to something else. With a few adjustments this piece could much better.
Very good opening, using the music to set the tone. The questions are good, they are open so people can answer but not intrusive either. The transition from the answers you were getting was a jolt switching from the "straight" to the "queer" answers gives shock value. This piece has been well scripted and I give kudos to the producers for taking grasp of a touchy subject and doing well with it.
The start of this piece I believe, could be stronger. The story is good, but to grab the listener's attention. Using shorter sound bytes and a bit of music in the background would make this piece stand out. The end was quite sudden If this is the first part of a piece then some sort of transition needs to be there to signify that there will be more to come.
Comments by Ernest Bluford
Comment for "Where Were You Fifth Period?"
Ernest Bluford
Posted on April 29, 2006 at 11:19 PM | Permalink
Review of Where Were You Fifth Period?
This piece, was different in the fact that it was the teacher that was asking the questions but this was not made clear untill the middle of the piece. This caused some confusion for me but overall a great piece.
Comment for "Teen Attitudes About the Media (#10,000)"
Ernest Bluford
Posted on April 29, 2006 at 11:18 PM | Permalink
Review of Teen Attitudes About the Media (#10,000)
For the brevity of this piece it's point is well heard from the start. This being a demo, I believe that the full length piece will be greatly recieved.
Comment for "Mother's Day outLoud"
Ernest Bluford
Posted on April 29, 2006 at 10:23 PM | Permalink
Review of Mother's Day outLoud
The open, is very upbeat and has some positive shock value. Which definitely grabs attention right away. The story is conveyed very well and uses some very great transitions between the sound bytes. The production is great and the meshing of the pieces and parts are good as well.
Comment for "Is It Just Me?"
Ernest Bluford
Posted on April 29, 2006 at 04:33 PM | Permalink
Review of Is It Just Me?
A good opener, the music was excellent and opening with the title as a question was to pose to the audience was great. And honest piece wanting answers from a society that refuses to give them. Good work!
Comment for "On (Not) Riding the School Bus"
Ernest Bluford
Posted on April 29, 2006 at 04:25 PM | Permalink
Review of On (Not) Riding the School Bus
A piece that could be shortened by at least a minute. Also, this piece did not grab my attention to great effect. But I will say that the target audience is well shown, and the message is clear. A strong open and close will improve this piece in my opinion.
Comment for "Selling A Papers"
Ernest Bluford
Posted on March 31, 2006 at 10:58 PM | Permalink
Review of Selling A Papers
This piece, while informative is a bit bland. Without using music it comes off as bland. The sound bytes are also too long even though the piece is short you loose the attention of the audience very fast. The average human attention span is about 2 seconds, which means you have that long to grab the audiences attention before they decide to listen to something else. With a few adjustments this piece could much better.
Comment for "Queer Youth Valentine"
Ernest Bluford
Posted on March 21, 2006 at 08:04 PM | Permalink
Review of Queer Youth Valentine
Very good opening, using the music to set the tone. The questions are good, they are open so people can answer but not intrusive either. The transition from the answers you were getting was a jolt switching from the "straight" to the "queer" answers gives shock value. This piece has been well scripted and I give kudos to the producers for taking grasp of a touchy subject and doing well with it.
Comment for "Arranged Marriage"
Ernest Bluford
Posted on March 21, 2006 at 07:49 PM | Permalink
Review of Arranged Marriage
The start of this piece I believe, could be stronger. The story is good, but to grab the listener's attention. Using shorter sound bytes and a bit of music in the background would make this piece stand out. The end was quite sudden If this is the first part of a piece then some sort of transition needs to be there to signify that there will be more to come.