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- Ernest Bluford
- Username: E_Daniel_Bluford
- Location: Euclid, OH
- Joined PRX: Mar 10, 2006
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- "On (Not) Riding the School Bus"
- Summary: ATMI reporter Noah Magen takes a look at riding the big yellow school bus.
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Review of On (Not) Riding the School Bus
Ernest Bluford
Posted on April 29, 2006 at 04:25 PM
A piece that could be shortened by at least a minute. Also, this piece did not grab my attention to great effect. But I will say that the target audience is well shown, and the message is clear. A strong open and close will improve this piece in my opinion.