One of the reasons i gave you a 2 out of 5 on this piece wasn't because of the content but because of your production primarily the way you delivered the story, in all truth i'd like to give you a 4 out of 5 on both part one and two of getting raised. I wish you would of taken more time on delivering this story and tried to have made it sound like you weren't reading from a piece of paper. Your content however was definetly a 4 out of 5, it took a lot of courage to put yourself out there and talk about something real I know i probably couldn't do it. If you slow down and take your time telling your story this can definetly become a stronger piece, you don't have to change what your saying just how your saying it. Even though theres no music or SFX this is still a strong piece without you utilising any of them. In fact i don't even think you need to add them sometimes it can be a distraction. You should go back and see what you can add to this piece if anything. Besides that i liked listening to your piece. Your already on your way to telling great stories on radio, you have the most important tool already which is being real and taking risks.