I liked this piece because it's a good story, well written, with nice, carefully chosen details that give a good sketch of the characters and situation in the short time of the piece.
I would have liked it even more if it had been a little more leisurely in pace. The protagonist moves very slowly, and the narration describing her movements felt a little rushed. There was obviously a choice made to keep it simple with just the narrator telling the story, but I wonder if some music and maybe other sound would have created another level of emotional depth. Maybe some Musak in the store, the sound of the ocean when the protagonist goes swimming, and/or some contemplative music to create spaces in the narrative, giving the listener a little more time to "see" the wonderful images in the story.
Review of A Cook's Notebook: Pregnant Lemonade
Jenn Blair
Posted on July 18, 2004 at 09:28 AM
I liked this piece because it's a good story, well written, with nice, carefully chosen details that give a good sketch of the characters and situation in the short time of the piece.
I would have liked it even more if it had been a little more leisurely in pace. The protagonist moves very slowly, and the narration describing her movements felt a little rushed. There was obviously a choice made to keep it simple with just the narrator telling the story, but I wonder if some music and maybe other sound would have created another level of emotional depth. Maybe some Musak in the store, the sound of the ocean when the protagonist goes swimming, and/or some contemplative music to create spaces in the narrative, giving the listener a little more time to "see" the wonderful images in the story.