Piece Comment

Memories Don't Easily Fade . . .


I was in search of a story with depth, as well as something I could relate to. This commentary stuck out to me the most. I appreciated the vulnerability the protagonist relayed, by speaking on a topic that she kept from so many people. It made the story feel warmer, as she was confident enough to share her life with the listener. I to have grown up with my father in and out of prison, so from personal experience I know that it isn't a stroll down a calm beach. Kids suffer the most from their parents poor decision. They are the ones who lose out on so many opportunities. Truthfully, I believe it makes you stronger as a person, because you're not clouded by fiction. You're living in reality, and dealing with it in your own unique way. I liked how you didn't fight back your true feelings. You helped me feel the thick tension of emotion wash over you, with each crack in your gentle voice. I didn't, however, like the opening sounds, as it took away from your voice. It would've sounded better if it was faded in the back even more, so that it does distract the listener. The clown picture was a great effect, but for those who cannot visually see it, it would've been more effective if your could describe it a little more. Also, describe who your father is so that the listener could put a face to this important figure. Overall, I enjoyed the delivery and direction the story moved in, I was just hanging on the edge of my sofa, for more.