Piece Comment

Review of "Black Fraternities Aim to Motivate College Bound Youth"


It's inspiring to see some young producers addressing topics important to the African-American community -- Jazmyne does a great job of choosing interesting stories in the news and providing spirited, insightful commentary about them. One area for improvement however, would be to bring in some more voices during the commentary sections -- for example, during the part about Black fraternities and sororities, it would have been interesting to perhaps hear from someone who is or was part of a fraternity or sorority. Another suggestion is to add more supporting evidence from outside sources to reinforce the opinions that are stated -- for example, in the adoption piece, Jazmyne states that parents need to be aware of the cultural, historical, and racial sensitivity that comes along with adopting a Black child. This could have been an excellent place to give a more concrete example of these challenegs -- perhaps a relevant story or statistic. These techniques would add greater depth to commentary that is already hitting on some good points. I look forward to seeing more from this group in the future!