First of all, great title. This is the only reason why I chose to listen to it. I like the titles that don?t try to have some deep emotional or ?earth-shattering? message in it. The title was quirky just like the piece.

I think this subject matter is extremely interesting and could be explored more in depth for a hard or soft feature of about 10 minutes. This was most likely not the aim of this piece but it could be done.

It was great that you went to an actual game instead of just talking to people about it. It brings the listener right into the action. The only thing I will say, and its kind of big since it?s the last impression the listener has of your piece, is that the ending seemed kind of abrupt. It left me with a feeling that this was just a snapshot of a D&D game and nothing more. Again, I don?t want to try to ascribe more intent in your idea than you probably wanted so I?ll just leave it at that. If that?s all you were aiming for than you did a great job.

It would be nice to see this subject explored more in depth though. There is a lot of potential with this subject that has been left relatively untapped.

Adam J. Vaughn