Nothing makes a better radio commentary than a person?s most embarrassing moment. Not only does the writer have to relive their experience, but they are sharing it with whomever will listen. There is a certain quality of voice that can only be paired with this type of essay, a sort of strained painful one in that you can tell the reader is still as familiar with the way this incident made them feel as the moment that it happened. All this is present. The tone, the story constantly going down hill and the brutal honesty that is required to make the piece one of complete humiliation. This story was such an easy one to relate to and the writing sometimes veered off into very vivid descriptions that helped to push the story forward and help the listener gain more perspective into how the narrator was feeling and what they were noticing at the time. Some musical transitions or foley could contribute to the overall feeling, however it an effective commentary as is. The best part of this whole ordeal is that the swimmer never gets better or moves up out of lane one, and instead spends her time making up cheers and dances.