Very funny and (occasionally) great use of sound. The introduction was horrible! It took allot away from the piece. SOME other suggestions, This piece needs allot of editing! And you have to be carefull and remember to speak slowly, clearly and understandably. Also you have to make sure the listener understands who is talking, in the middle some girl comes in and reads a poem, I have no ideal who she is! Also a great piece is relatable, so making this story of a burning building a story about losing something you love or remembering something you love will connect more with listeners and keep there interest till the end. But you did have a great sense oh humor which kept my interest and you made some really good points in your piece. Nice try! Can?t wait to hear the next one, or this one edited again and changed around a little bit!