Though I am prompted to “gently criticize” my fellow youth, I don’t believe this piece is able to be aired at this point. I feel the piece’s topic is an interesting one but will need to be revised in order catch the audience’s attention. It honestly sounds like a rough draft. All the ideas are there, but they just need to be worked on.
There are quite a few technical problems that need to be fixed, like the addition of a few pauses and the cutting of the stuttering the narrator performs. At 3:16, there is a very long, dead pause that shouldn’t be there. The narrator should also use a slower tempo. His fast pace seems to throw me off, making me feel that this story is not one of importance, especially when put together with those of the interviewees. Also, I feel that the performance is a bit sketchy, sounding like the narrator is reading off a script.
A second trip to the recording studio with some of the tips given above should go a long way for this piece.
Review of Music in Retail Settings
Carlos Maeda
Posted on November 27, 2005 at 04:24 PM
Though I am prompted to “gently criticize” my fellow youth, I don’t believe this piece is able to be aired at this point. I feel the piece’s topic is an interesting one but will need to be revised in order catch the audience’s attention. It honestly sounds like a rough draft. All the ideas are there, but they just need to be worked on.
There are quite a few technical problems that need to be fixed, like the addition of a few pauses and the cutting of the stuttering the narrator performs. At 3:16, there is a very long, dead pause that shouldn’t be there. The narrator should also use a slower tempo. His fast pace seems to throw me off, making me feel that this story is not one of importance, especially when put together with those of the interviewees. Also, I feel that the performance is a bit sketchy, sounding like the narrator is reading off a script.
A second trip to the recording studio with some of the tips given above should go a long way for this piece.