Posted on February 08, 2005 at 09:25 AM
I like the story of this independent coffee house and the exploration of where exactly this coffee house culture came from. This is a compelling question and a nice approach. But this piece seems to focus much more on this novel idea than coffee rituals going to die? I wanted to be introduced to a customer earlier on and find out what what this place meant to other people. The Starbucks could be more explicit - how exactly does the owner feel about Starbucks? I though the pacing, narration and music were strong and generally an engaging piece.
Posted on February 03, 2005 at 10:19 AM
This piece is a beautiful, rambling, experimental collage of voices, stories and music related to the word and concept of love. It is easy to relate to the random voices that come in and out. I did not necessarily leave with a clear sense of the connection to capitalism or that as being a major theme but felt totally engaged with by the format. It could work better for air as excerpts given its length.
Posted on January 30, 2005 at 07:45 PM
This piece offers a unique and timely portrait of evangelical christians, or highway missionaries. A couple ministering to truckers who they see as an underserved population. This piece has great reflections from the Walkers on the work they do, tape of the Walkers prayers and descriptions of their RV among trucks. I miss hearing any interaction between truckers and the Walkers until the very end. This piece could work well as a portrait of this couple's unusual pastime or to complicate ever so popular discussion of evangelical christianity.
Posted on January 30, 2005 at 07:34 PM
This diary style piece gets deep into the life of Alex, an insightful and articulate blind teenager. This piece does a fantastic job of taking the listener through scenes and allowing Alex to take you through his own life. The end seems abrubt - maybe even a longer fade out of the cane sound? Excellently crafted and a welcoming entrance into the life of a stranger with a unique perspective.
Posted on January 22, 2005 at 07:48 PM
This piece profiles Josh, a Maine teenage poet with a unique and fascinating fantasy card game. The narrator's descriptions are interesting but I wanted to hear more of Josh's life as well. I would have loved to hear more of his mother and his house and school. The segment where Josh lists his goals is powerful and the best window we get into who he is. If that part came earlier we could get more engaged in who he is earlier. Overall personal and engaging.
Posted on January 21, 2005 at 10:43 AM
This piece is about the match of a cultural and religious identity with an unlikely musical form. The interview with Matisyahu is the more compelling bit of this piece alongside his music. I love the transition from the narrator to the live music ("what happened next was) and I think it could use even less of the narrator. This piece could be shorter if cut down to the interview and music.
Posted on January 18, 2005 at 01:14 PM
I love the energy of this piece. The layering of voices of women involved with singing, partying and selling works spledidly. It also managed to capture the complex role tupperware parties played in the lives of many women while not taking itself too seriously. This piece stands alone but could also work nicely next to a segment on women's history.
Posted on January 18, 2005 at 07:38 AM
This piece had me engaged right from the beginning until the last kick "end of message." Dmae's relationship to her mother is easy to connect with. The piece is particularly poignant as an audio piece since its focus on memorializing the mother is through her voice. Dmae's voice is also powerfully engaging.
Posted on January 16, 2005 at 02:51 PM
I found the visual descriptions in this piece the most exciting. I love picturing the huge cylinders of lipstick, the detailed makeup descriptions and the mom. The music makes me wish there was more acbkground sounds to give me context as well. I wish we didn't know about Lyod and the factory visit before the story gets told. Ladling lipstick is a great image.
Posted on November 23, 2004 at 08:00 AM
I really appreciate any piece that raises challenging and NEW questions about same sex marraige. The new question here is about the economy which is something I haven't heard being mentioned.
I think it could work to build on this commentary and have some tape from the Los Vegas lisence bureau or a same sex couple saying why they do want to get married when McDonald asks the question.
I like "heat seeking amendments."
Posted on September 24, 2004 at 04:20 PM
I was caught by the tone of this piece immediately. It takes a while to figure out what the story is about though. I could use more background info earlier on. I enjoyed the format of our narrators through the subway interwoven with the subjects voices.
As an avid Six Feet Under viewer, the music was too specific for me and I found it really distracting. The association is so strong I can't pull myself away from pictuing the series opening sequence instead of your story.
Posted on August 21, 2004 at 08:34 PM
I love the content here and the focus (connection?) of this woman's survival and her pursuit of a music career. The narrater voice doesn't seem matched to the interviewee. It may help to hear the narrator actually asking her a question, evenjust once to balance the narrator and interviewee's different tones. The focus of her having survived a terrorist attack gets lost in her persuing her career by the end of the piece. The bits of music and her reflections are great.
Posted on August 21, 2004 at 08:22 PM
This piece is very well written. I wish it included ambient sounds or some tape on the trip. I think the length is perfect and the story is engaging.
Posted on August 17, 2004 at 07:28 PM
The field recording of you carrying is fantastic! The beginning is a little confusing where you are going without reading the text here of what is coming up.
Posted on August 17, 2004 at 07:15 PM
This collage is so successful at giving us a survey of the lives of youth incarcerated here. It is a very successful way to introduce these voices. I want to hear more! The sound is great too.
Posted on August 17, 2004 at 07:11 PM
I really love the creativity in this piece. You can tell everything about what you think about being 30 without you directly describing it. The jump to 30 maybe needs a little more set up.
Posted on August 17, 2004 at 07:03 PM
I love the way this piece introduces art-o-mat as a means for people to engage differently in art. I think the ambient sounds work really well. What about following one piece through the artist finding out about the art-o-mat, making a piece, the piece in the machine to an owner? I also really enjoy the interviews with individuals describing their pieces.
Posted on August 17, 2004 at 06:55 PM
I love the splicing of the mother and father piecing together the story. I wonder how the piece would work with music? And what if you had explored more how she knew he was never coming back. What kind of feeling was that and what did she do to go about planning his funeral? I like stories that connect me to a character in an empathic manner and I think knowing more about these parents (what are their lives like, where do they live, what is their family like?) would be helpful. It's wonderful to have the opportunity to hear from that and I would love to know more.